PS: I was not able to complete the portrait of my friend's son I will continue that after I get back in march.

namely, the right eye defies human anatomy, and the mouth/teeth are overworked, and slightly stylized. too much information about the teeth is included, drawing attention and making them seem like a set of wooden dentures from the 17th century. the mouth is composed of line, rather than separated into discrete masses. think of a mouth as four oval shapes, thinner on top. each one of these shapes must be suggested in order to make it appear natural. even when the lips are stretched into a smile, they retain (especially the bottom) their principle form.

I think there are times when the technicalities of drawing do take second place.

Have fun

Phil

i agree with the above, that it is a great effort for a plane.
but i think the technicalities are always, always primary.

anyway, all you have to do is be alittle aggressive with an artgum and tkae the values down. in the photo, look how refletive the bottom lip is. and, if you squint, youll see it easier, and youll see that the teeth are very very faintly distinguished.

whenever i have trouble with mouths, i squint and it ususally makes my errors apparent. or blur your eyes, if the lighting is too dark to make quinting effective.
anyway, i definitely didnt want to be obnoxious or belittle your drawing. its good.

later

ill post it later
later and keep it up.

Quote namely, the right eye defies human anatomy

the mouth is composed of line, rather than separated into discrete masses. think of a mouth as four oval shapes, thinner on top. each one of these shapes must be suggested in order to make it appear natural. even when the lips are stretched into a smile, they retain (especially the bottom) their principle form.

Verdaccio, I just noticed your comment on the eye. Again, it is the fault of the digital image, the shape of the eye is definitely not what is seen in the picture. What is prominently seen as the outline of the eye is not the actual outline but a little shadow below the eye! I had to take the picture with the flash of as the graphite was reflecting in certain spots.

As far as the mouth goes, I think it has to do with the way she smiles, I was looking at few other pictures of her smiling and they all look similar, so I am not sure if it is the fault of the internet.

Thanks

Quote anyway, i definitely didnt want to be obnoxious or belittle your drawing. its good.

No offence was taken, I am here to get critiques/ suggestions
This is just my third attempt at portraiture and I am here to learn!

So you obviously was busy on your flight. I agree with Phil, what a task to draw at 35,000 feet. I would have been blowing charcoal dust all over everybody. Anyway we have a drawing to look at and a very tough one at that. This is very deceiving picture to draw, Mrs. Indira Gandhi has a head tilt, three quarter profile and she's looking to the left. REALLY TOUGH!!!

It's hard to comment on the tonal range because the scan is so dark. I can tell your blending is coming along, just remember Contrast! Darks and lights. keep it balanced and you will be fine. What I'm seeing with the mouth is that it looks like you've drawn it straight as if she is looking right at you with no head tilt, there is no angle to her mouth, it looks like it may need to turn a couple of degrees counter clockwise. the lips need some more tone. In the corners of her mouth there should be some more shadow, the middle of her upper lip and lower lip there are some nice highlights that need to be added, that should give them some nice shape.

You've nailed the nose. Nice job!

I can't really see a lot of the eyes on my monitor so, no comment. (sorry)
The rest looks great!

I've reattached the original and you rendering together below, I tried to brighten it in photoshop. Maybe this will help you understand my critique better.

Enjoy your day!

Marc Forest.
http://www.marcforest.com

about the eye. by defied anatomy,( which was asnotty way of putting it, sorry) i mean its off the facial angle, and its not quite long enough. we're talking like one mm here, but its significant. also, since the eye is drected out of the picture, the main light part of the ball is going to be the upper left side, where the iris meets the white, not the highlight in the pupil.

as for the mouth, teeth, in the photo, you can see how the bottom lip is much brighter than any other part of the face (except the eye highlights(. this will make the whole mouth look very convincing.

3rd attempt. i am impressed. my 3rd sttempt looked like something from picasso meets dawn of the dead.

later, and ekkp it up. i cant wait to see your next drawings.